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1月18日雅思大作文真题参考范文 | 今天孩子享有的自由太多了吗?

作者: 2020-02-06 15:26 来源:宁波编辑
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2020年1月18日雅思大作文题目

今天孩子享有的自由太多了吗?

Some people think that children nowadays have too much freedom. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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解析&审题

题材:孩子教育

题型:双边讨论(推荐)

关键词:children(孩子)+ freedom(自由)

需要讨论的观点:现在,孩子得到的自由是不是太多了?

复现情况:新题

相似题目:In many parts of the world, children have more freedom than they used to have. Is this a positive or negative development? (2017/7/8)

很多人认为,孩子现在享受到的自由比以前多,已经达到有害的地步了(自由太多就是有害的意思)。本题要求考生对这个话题发表观点。

孩子拥有很多的自由,这究竟是一件好事还是坏事?这个问题,显然应该进行分类双边讨论:就有些自由而言(比如缺乏监管,自由使用电脑等),太多的话显然会影响孩子的学习和性格发展,但就另外一些自由而言(比如自由思考,自由做负责任的决定),显然就不存在过多的问题,而且越多越好。因此,本题的基本发展思路依然是分类讨论,即对题目中的关键词进行分类,然后分别进行讨论,随后得出自己的观点。

经常阅读本栏目的烤鸭,想必已经注意到,在前两场雅思考试的范文中,老雅使用的都是这种“分类讨论”的解题模式。比如2020年1月11日的考试,老雅讨论了“气候变化对不同企业的影响”;2020年1月16日的考试,老雅讨论了“没有室外空间对个人和整个城市的影响”。不难看出,这种分类讨论的思维模式是非常有用的,大家可以在写作实践中加以应用。

老师笔记

01

Children today are apparently enjoying more freedom than ever before. This is so because the technological advances have relieved children of much of their manual labor and because parents and schools these days are far less restrictive than they were. 

今天的孩子显然比以往任何时候都享有更多的自由。之所以如此,是因为科技的进步把孩子们从体力劳动中解放出来,也因为现在父母和学校给孩子的限制比过去要小得多。

解析

(1) 本段提出需要讨论的现象,并简单地分析了原因。

(2) Apparently 显然地

(3) Manual labor 手工劳动

(4) Restrictive 限制性的

02

It may turn out to be a bad thing that children have too much free time at their disposal. Without the supervision of their parents and teachers, many children end upbeing addicted to computer games or other unhealthy habits. This is detrimental to both their academic development and character formation. In contrast, children before had to help their parents do the housework and they did not have calculators or computers to help them with their maths, so they would have to spend much time on all these tasks during which they learned the value of hard work and cooperation.

孩子们有太多的空闲时间可以支配,这可能是件坏事。没有父母和老师的监督,许多孩子最终沉迷于电脑游戏或者其他不健康的习惯。这对他们的学习进步和性格形成都是不利的。相反,以前的孩子们不得不帮助他们的父母做家务,他们也没有计算器或计算机来帮助他们的数学,所以他们将不得不花很多时间在所有这些任务上,而在这些任务中,他们学会了努力工作和合作的价值。

解析

(1) 本段论证如果孩子有太多自己支配时间的自由,可能会对其学习和性格形成不利。

(2) At their disposal 供他们支配

(3) Supervision 监督

(4) End up  结果沦为......

(5) Be addicted to... 对......上瘾

(6) Detrimental 有害的

03

Yet this does not mean that children should not enjoy that much freedom. In fact, I would argue for the benefits freedom can bring to children. When given the freedom of time and mind, children can fully explore their own potentials instead of being told to do things they are not really interested in. If a child has a strong passion for music, but is forced to spend much of his time on some more “practical” subjects like physics and chemistry, his talent for music may be wasted and he will never be happy in life. Meanwhile, freedom also breeds independence and responsibility. When left free to make their own decisions, many children actually become more independent and responsible.

然而,这并不意味着孩子不应该享受那么多的自由。事实上,我主张自由可以给孩子带来诸多好处。如果有时间和思想的自由,孩子们可以好好发掘自己的潜力,而不是被告知去做他们不真正感兴趣的事情。如果一个孩子对音乐有强烈的热情,但被迫把大部分时间花在像物理和化学这样更“实用”学科上,他的音乐天赋就可能会被浪费,他在生活中永远不会快乐。同时,自由也孕育着独立和责任。当孩子们能够自由做出自己的决定时,他们实际上变得更加独立和有责任感。

解析

(1) 本段讨论有些自由对孩子们的成长和幸福非常有利。

(2) Argue for 支持......; 主张......

(3) Explore 探索

(4) Potential 潜力

(5) To have a strong passion for... 非常喜爱......

(6) Breed 孕育

04

To conclude, some kinds of freedom, if given too much, may be harmful to children, but when it comes to free mind and free choice, there can never be too much of them.  

总之,有些类型的自由,如果给予太多,可能会对儿童有害,但当涉及到自由的思想和自由的选择,永远不可能有太多的自由。

解析

(1) 本段表明观点,并回答题目的问题:有些自由太多对孩子不好,有些自由再多都不为过。

(2) When it comes to... 当谈到......;至于......

(3) There can never be too much of... ......永远都不会太多

高分范文

Children today are apparently enjoying more freedom than ever before. This is so because the technological advances have relieved children of much of their manual labor and because parents and schools these days are far less restrictive than they were.  

It may turn out to be a bad thing that children have too much free time at their disposal. Without the supervision of their parents and teachers, many children end up being addicted to computer games or other unhealthy habits. This is detrimental to both their academic development and character formation. In contrast, children before had to help their parents do the housework and they did not have calculators or computers to help them with their maths, so they would have to spend much time on all these tasks during which they learned the value of hard work and cooperation.

Yet this does not mean that children should not enjoy that much freedom. In fact, I would argue for the benefits freedom can bring to children. When given the freedom of time and mind, children can fully explore their own potentials instead of being told to do things they are not really interested in. If a child has a strong passion for music, but is forced to spend much of his time on some more “practical” subjects like physics and chemistry, his talent for music may be wasted and he will never be happy in life. Meanwhile, freedom also breeds independence and responsibility. When left free to make their own decisions, many children actually become more independent and responsible.

To conclude, some kinds of freedom, if given too much, may be harmful to children, but when it comes to free mind and free choice, there can never be too much of them.   

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